Yeah, Cat’s bag is still on the J’kelri space ship. I guess The bag’s out of the cat (that was a reach, I’m sorry)

Yeah, sunset doesn’t make sense, I think I’ll change that.

Cat is very hungry, but cat is used to missing meals at the monastery, and the days excitement kind of overrode that feeling.

Thank you for your feedback.

I’m glad to hear that you like it! This is strongly inspired by Star Wars, so I’m glad it’s got good vibes and not ripoff vibes lol.

You do a lot to lay out social conventions and economic realities, maybe a bit too detailed and getting sidetracked with it sometimes, but it’s a hard line to toe and you do a good job.

Yeah, honestly this is after a bunch of editing too. I’m glad to hear that I did a good job though. I was trying to do a lot of world building because I was thinking of making it a starfinder campaign before I settled on a novel. I have a “supplemental materials” story on wattpad that’s unpublished with all the details I’ve taken out lol.

I like Cat but I wonder why she has internalized this belief system so thoroughly in just a few years, and wonder at the people who volunteer to help her, and think she might be being taken for a ride. I don’t know how illegal the stuff her smuggler friend wants her to move is, but the thing is, neither does Cat.

So I feel there’s mystery here and Cat’s naivete being purposeful and showing room to grow. I feel like diving into her new religion is her way of coping with the nightmare she found herself thrust into, far away from everyone and knowing nothing about anything, then awakening to a kind community who heard her say “I need to find my way in the universe (literally)” and they were like “it’s funny you should say that.” Pretty big coincidence.

no spoilers, but your head is in the right place

Thank you again for your feedback

The maker of brave is a homophobe though, so I wouldn’t suggest it

suspiciously helpful sidekicks and mysterious room which is closed

Yep, no spoilers though

btw, did cat get her stuff from the original ship, timing is very confusing

Like the one that Cat got to J’kelri on? There wasn’t much on it, but I elaborate on it in the next chapter

Can you elaborate on timing?

Thank you for your feedback!

Thank you so much. I know I posted this quickly after the first, please take you time.

Actually, mine is hard sci-fi but themes of social change are common there as well. but my book specifically has a female bug protagonist who joins a multi species crew and falls for the human.

This is shockingly close to the novel I’m writing

Thank you for your feedback! I see what you mean, I hadn’t really considered the other senses for this chapter, it gets a little better later.

Thank you for your feedback, I really appreciate it! I agree this chapter needs some work, I just sort of threw a bunch of exposition in it. I’d get rid of it completely, but it introduces some characters that are important later.

That’s actually kinda sick though

Jesus that whole comment was . Look, you said some stupid shit and a bunch of actually literate human beings found it. Just take the L and move on.

I dont know what you want me to say

The title of a book. I thought that was clear.

If you don’t want to get clowned on, don’t say clown shit.

smoothbrains

literally refuses to read a book, or suggest one of their own

genuinely, what do you suggest that would show that this tiny instance of a tiny social media framework is worth botting?

This plan works best if you start a robot cult to maintain it

Me and the comrades preparing to post to hexbear . net